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So I Thought by ~Phu-Phu-Hugs-Me:iconPhu-Phu-Hugs-Me:

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I might want to start drinking again
until the scene is dead with a taste
of your Valium—tripping
with fumbling legs and eyes
doused in drowsy delusions
of a dead father I can’t
seem to remember having.
I’m starting to feel restive
in my dizzied head as words spill out
in excess, fogging up my thoughts
until everything becomes a bared
sky hazed with stupor,
and when the sun rises
it splits in two
before my eyes (open
in the morning).
©2009 ~Phu-Phu-Hugs-Me
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Author's Comments

Thank you to =Synith for suggesting this piece and to ^LadyLincoln for featuring it as a Daily Deviation! :heart:
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EDITS were made a while ago. I just didn't update. Edits (7/23/09) were made once again; although, I'm still working on this.
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D; I feel sick. Sick to my stomach. I hope it goes away.

This is like a skeleton, as someone put it, without the flesh. This is, honestly, entirely raw. (The word "raw" makes me feel more sick :ohnoes:) This was in response to the prompt, "a day when two suns rose." Bah. I don't like that prompt. But no one else was posting, so I did D;

I spammed the thread with my post of a skeletal poem! :0

Daily Deviation

Given 2009-07-20

So I Thought by ~Phu-Phu-Hugs-Me, possesses a rare honesty that is raw and intense. (Suggested by =Synith and Featured by ^LadyLincoln)

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=Synith Jul 17, 2009, 3:58:31 PM
I’ll start tripping
with fumbling legs and eyes
doused in a doubled effect
from tipple.


This is just purely an amazing read.

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It's kinda like being shot out of a cannon in slow motion.
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~Phu-Phu-Hugs-Me Jul 17, 2009, 7:29:28 PM
Thank you, and thanks for adding it to your favorites! :heart: [:

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Candy talks to strangers
Thinks her life's in danger
No one gives a damn about her hair

:G
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*gracelette Jul 19, 2009, 11:49:33 PM
Congratulations =)

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RIP bee

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~ancellacak Jul 19, 2009, 11:51:45 PM
I found this really interesting and enjoyable to read! :) Awesomely done! <333 :XD:

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~Dezhimself Jul 20, 2009, 12:34:25 AM
heres to your gettin better :)
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~Phu-Phu-Hugs-Me Jul 20, 2009, 12:44:22 AM
Why thank you! :)

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Candy talks to strangers
Thinks her life's in danger
No one gives a damn about her hair

:G
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~Phu-Phu-Hugs-Me Jul 20, 2009, 12:45:12 AM
I'm glad you did, and thank you for the comment. <3

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Candy talks to strangers
Thinks her life's in danger
No one gives a damn about her hair

:G
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~Phu-Phu-Hugs-Me Jul 20, 2009, 12:45:39 AM
Thank you :heart:

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Candy talks to strangers
Thinks her life's in danger
No one gives a damn about her hair

:G
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~springearthbender14 Jul 20, 2009, 1:29:20 AM
Actually, it sounds more like a drunken person is saying all that is written above,no offense!:drunk:

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One's company, Two's a crowd, Three's a party
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